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username
Title: owner of a lonely heart
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PostPosted: Sep 23 2009 09:06 pm Reply with quote Back to top

nice, another blog i wont care about.

actually, i just dont care for MTG in general


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Dr. Jeebus
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PostPosted: Oct 12 2009 02:48 pm Reply with quote Back to top

Technically updated.


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PostPosted: Oct 13 2009 12:54 am Reply with quote Back to top

I was wondering when either you or Haddox would start posting again, or did someone here kill and eat Haddox in a desperate food shortage? Also, I heard eating the elusive Flying Hellfish species that only appears on the internet iss known to be extremely fattening, so if anyone did eat Haddox, expect consequences Razz.
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Dr. Jeebus
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PostPosted: Oct 13 2009 10:37 am Reply with quote Back to top

What the fuck are you talking about?


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SoldierHawk
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PostPosted: Oct 13 2009 11:55 am Reply with quote Back to top

Aw, too bad, but I understand.

You don't have to get unbanned to do set reviews you know...I enjoyed reading them. (And I don't even play Magic lol.)




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Dr. Jeebus
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PostPosted: Oct 13 2009 12:22 pm Reply with quote Back to top

I don't have to be unbanned to do set reviews and there are a lot of people who shared their disappointment in not being able to read one for Zendikar with me, but being unable to post on MTGS really takes away my motivation.


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SoldierHawk
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PostPosted: Oct 13 2009 12:43 pm Reply with quote Back to top

Yeah I can understand that. When your main audience isn't there its not nearly as much fun.




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Dr. Jeebus
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PostPosted: Nov 05 2009 01:02 am Reply with quote Back to top

Prologue to my novel is up in the blog. Everyone go read it right now. I demand feedback!


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SoldierHawk
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PostPosted: Nov 05 2009 01:16 am Reply with quote Back to top

ZOMG IT IS TEH AWESOMEMEST AWESOMEYAWESOME RITING EVAR!!1!!!!!1!!1!!!

Very Happy Well done you.




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Sexton Hardcastle
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PostPosted: Nov 05 2009 01:19 am Reply with quote Back to top

I can't offer much in terms of actual feedback other then I enjoyed it and would buy the book. I'm curious to see what happens next...or why it's the main characters fault I should say.
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Title: owner of a lonely heart
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PostPosted: Nov 05 2009 02:20 am Reply with quote Back to top

i wasnt sure what you were writing (fiction, science fiction, etc etc) so it took me a second to realize what you were writing about. but thats mostly because i forgot what you said you were going to write about. so far so good.

the only thing you need to fix, is fiance.

fiance = male
fiancee = female


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Dr. Jeebus
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PostPosted: Nov 05 2009 10:36 am Reply with quote Back to top

username, I had never said what I was writing about, but I thought use of the word "novel" implied fiction. Thanks for the feedback so far you guys, and to anyone remember I just need your impression on whether or not you enjoyed it and would read on. Don't read it like you're correcting a paper.


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Rydog
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PostPosted: Nov 05 2009 11:11 am Reply with quote Back to top

Keep writing....seems like it could be a good read.
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Title: owner of a lonely heart
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PostPosted: Nov 05 2009 11:40 am Reply with quote Back to top

Dr. Jeebus wrote:
username, I had never said what I was writing about, but I thought use of the word "novel" implied fiction.

i got that, i just didnt understand what type of fiction you were going to approach. sci-fi, fantasy, theological, political, et al.

and sorry about the nitpick on 'fiance' but my OCD acted up there


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PostPosted: Nov 05 2009 12:25 pm Reply with quote Back to top

username wrote:
Dr. Jeebus wrote:
username, I had never said what I was writing about, but I thought use of the word "novel" implied fiction.

i got that, i just didnt understand what type of fiction you were going to approach. sci-fi, fantasy, theological, political, et al.

and sorry about the nitpick on 'fiance' but my OCD acted up there

No worries. I never even knew they were different words and actually consulted a dictionary, but you are indeed correct so I fix that post haste. As for genre, um...dark theological comedy? (Real comedy, not like Greek comedies)


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Title: owner of a lonely heart
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PostPosted: Nov 05 2009 02:31 pm Reply with quote Back to top

Dr. Jeebus wrote:
username wrote:
Dr. Jeebus wrote:
username, I had never said what I was writing about, but I thought use of the word "novel" implied fiction.

i got that, i just didnt understand what type of fiction you were going to approach. sci-fi, fantasy, theological, political, et al.

and sorry about the nitpick on 'fiance' but my OCD acted up there

No worries. I never even knew they were different words and actually consulted a dictionary, but you are indeed correct so I fix that post haste.

eh, its not common knowledge, but the only reason i know it was because i took 2 years of french in high school many moons ago


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Optimist With Doubts
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Joined: Dec 17 2007
PostPosted: Nov 05 2009 04:06 pm Reply with quote Back to top

I liked it, hope to read more. If I had anything to say against it's that you tend to maybe over-explain things.


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Teralyx
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PostPosted: Nov 05 2009 05:10 pm Reply with quote Back to top

I like that actually, it creates a more vivid image in the reader's mind.


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JoshWoodzy
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PostPosted: Nov 05 2009 05:42 pm Reply with quote Back to top

I approve of this, DJ. So far.


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Eddie_Hyde
Title: Ernie with the Disposal
Joined: Apr 13 2009
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PostPosted: Nov 05 2009 07:02 pm Reply with quote Back to top

Now, I'm gonna come right out and admit it. I fucking hate first person narration. There's no real logical reason for it, just always have. That, however, was fucking excellent. The descriptions and 'voice' are excellent, and what I can see of the storyline makes it look like It'll really the reader in. If your book was published, Jeebs, I would buy it in a second.


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PostPosted: Nov 05 2009 08:25 pm Reply with quote Back to top

What era is this set in?

And this may prove to be a good read when it's done

I really hope this gets published when it's finished.

And will keeping us updated on the progress also include excerpts? I know you won't be dumb enough to post whole chapters so that's why I ask



 
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Dr. Jeebus
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PostPosted: Nov 05 2009 10:54 pm Reply with quote Back to top

Eddie, you may be upset then cause the voice will change a bit as we flash back to the events leading up to this, but hopefully you still like my style.

Hacker, I do not plan to include more excerpts. The main goal of posting this was so SH and I could see if our combined judgment in terms of what is worth having someone read is accurate and to see if people liked this so far. If everyone hated it, I'd either have to give up or start over, so glad to see that isn't the case.


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PostPosted: Nov 05 2009 11:03 pm Reply with quote Back to top

Well if you are moving on then you should use your blog as a....blog keeping us informed of the progress.


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JoshWoodzy
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PostPosted: Nov 05 2009 11:08 pm Reply with quote Back to top

Yeah, what he said. Or if you don't plan on updating the blog anymore at all put that shit in a archive somewhere on the site so people don't think it's an actual blog that gets updated.


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Cameron
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PostPosted: Nov 05 2009 11:12 pm Reply with quote Back to top

One of the reasons I hate first-person perspectives in literature is that I usually end up hating the protagonist and their inner thoughts grate on my nerves (unless it's a Bret Easton Ellis novel and they have no internal thoughts); your prologue is an exception to this rule. The protagonist goes into detail that actually matters, and doesn't insult my intelligence in the process, which are usually the main problems I have with this style of narration. So, not only do I like the narrator of your story, but the premise sounds awesome. In answer to your question: heck yes, I would keep reading. Very Happy


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