It was interesting, I think for the first song the 3min 30 sec one. Less is more at times... It felt like i kept transitioning into pieces that could be the beginning of a whole new song. Which is fine. I liked what we had going on around 1:10ish in the song.

Maybe use some music software to play with each part of that song... I feel at times you have too much. The first part that main beat overwhelmed everything else.

On song #2 the one with lyrics.. Maybe if you could make the voice a bit clearer, voice sounded decent though.

I guess I thought it was alright, but as not a music expert, only real piece of advice i can give is less can be more. Listen to other music people are doing and it'll perhaps allow you to see tools to express yourselves the way you want to.


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Jon Snow delving into MUSIC THEORY LAND:

I'm going to add.. this is me branching off into theory land, I think there's some truth in it, but i honestly don't really pay that much attention to music:

IF you can first create a pace in the background that is maintained may help the listener follow the song. Then build things around that steady beat. Secondly create patterns that rest on top of that beat. The patterns can be of different lenghts just have them repeat. We can have a dun dun Bam.. dun dun Bam pattern going on. Then having a longer seperate pattern going on as well. Sometimes the ends of those patterns can coincide.. then you can mix it up a little and on one of the Bams.. you just keep going BaM BAM BAM indicating a change of pace.. build up to a big event.. then die it all back down again.

I don't know.. I'm more or less trying to decompose the sound, but I'm sure if you do it that way you'd end up with something super simple. Maybe start that way then build off it, and go by ear as to what sounds good.

Listen to the beginning of this song:



Note how they have the layers of patterns. They have their central re-occuring beat. Actually they have two they have the bass beat and then that higher pitched short pattern.

That doesn't mean you all songs have to be that way, or your song has to be. I really think playing music is like telling story. That main beat is the main character it gives us something to relate to through the whole song, and carries us into the next sequence, and you can transistion off that steady pattern, and add around it. Have it dampen (go to to really soft sound) then re-emerge and were back to what we listeners know.

If that sounds complete bonkers to you, then basically I think there's potential in what you're doing use some tweaking though. Listen to things you like and try to find what is it about it that you like. Maybe can use those concepts in your work. [/quote]

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As for you, JonSnow, I don't want to sound mean, but I know what I'm doing. I've been doing it all my life. You've got no experiece at all, so yeah. As my dad used to say, "Don't teach a father how to impregnate ladies."

Sorry, I was just throwin' out ideas willy nilly. Like I said I don't know music that well, it sounded right as i said it. Letting my instincts and intuition guide me there. Aeonic the point of that song wasn't whether it was good just illustrating the point i was feebly constucting, since it's the first time i've ever really tried to fundamentally talk about music.

I have a beleif that all expression can be undertood as communication, books, music, painting etc...

Anyway.. good job Nekko, I did listen to it all, so you should consider it in that way a success. It's not normally music I would listen to, and I personally felt a lot was happening. It was alright, it WASN'T painful to listen, it was decent.... but thats my overall thoughts. Maybe andrewman or other musically inclinded peers can offer you better feed back : ).

I love you father's quote... so full of wisdom . "Don't teach a father of 10 how to impregnant women... DAMMIT woman!"